Over the weekend I hung out with my two closest friends, Anna Lee and Logan. We met up at Mia Padres, to eat mexiacn food because I was craving gracomolie. Then we walked down to the crosswalk right by prowe and waited till it was our turn to cross, we were standing there forever. Then we reliezed that we had been pressing the wrong button. So after we finally got across we headed over to mcdonalds and each got a mcflurry. Then we walked over to prowe and ate it right outside the red mango.
Then we went inside barnes adn noble and looked around, then we went to different stores trying on clothes. After that, Logans mom picked all of us up and we went to Logans house to sleep over, we talked about one direction, justin bieber and more. Then we decieded to go to sleep and I called sleeping on "the egg" it's this really big, comfortable chair that Logan has. Anna Lee tried to convince me that we could both fit....but we couldn't. So we promised her that the next time she could sleep in "the egg" haha!
Margaret, think about how you could change up your sentences to tell this story more effectively. You have a lot of sentences that begin with "then." What if you rearranged them all to be different?
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